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Improvements - 
Show off more skills with SFX and lip-syncing 
more dramatic change from bear to baby

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This has been the route of so much stress and worry but I'm fairly proud of it (even if the more I watch it the more I find faults. I'm a bit self critical. Oops.).

As a final adjustment (hopefully) for my video I want to do some colour correction to help improve the aesthetic of the video and help make it look more professional. However, this is not an area I'm particularly confident in therefore I have turned to the help of youtube for a tutorial and this is the one I found. 



I made multiple attempts with this and unfortunately it did not look right and made my video WAY too over saturated. Instead I played around with various set effects on Premiere pro and found one that works. 

The second draft of my music video ladies and gentlemen!

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https://giphy.com/gifs/media-youth-glass-aniamls-TJeH5lcIu3PTq

After this draft I received some feedback from a peer with some ideas and alterations I could include which I found quite valuable.

I really like it Josie, it actually made me feel a lot of sympathy for her and has a real emotional punch to it. So in that sense, mission accomplished. 

1. Perhaps start with a white screen and blur in the baby clothes
2. I think there should be some quick pacing (perhaps double time to the beat) to signify how quickly her life has changed
3. Brief bit of Face time footage from someone else’s phone with you showing him/her off?
4. Come of the shots are a little blurry Shot a little blurry 
5. With the beat changes perhaps some quick cutaways (you happy, gig tickets being replaced by pics of you and bear etc)
6. Cutaways of scrolling through Facebook events that she can’t go to followed by quick cutaway of your eyes looking sad and that, eyeline match from you to ‘teddy’
7. Need to look more knackered towards the end, could use a filter for this. 
8. Shot of empty bed. Perhaps again, quick cutaway of you exhausted trying to catch 5-10 mins nap.
9. If filming again maybe make the room messier 
10. Before the bin liner shot, perhaps a cutaway of you sat staring at the pile of baby stuff, a bit of a repeat of the shot of you and teddy on the bed earlier on.
11. Last 40 seconds – think we need a few more cutaways of sad looking Josie perhaps near the end a mid shot of you zipping up your coat and leaving the house (OSS of eyeline match and CU of you looking into the distance taking a deep breath and facing your future before the sad baby shot.
12. Other idea was to have you sat head in hands on the sofa perhaps looking blankly into the middle distance or at the camera with a despondent look but film it twice and with the second take move the bear around a lot as if it is crawling and getting everywhere.
13. Picking loads of baby stuff off of the floor
14. Perhaps an over the shoulder shot of you writing a letter to the baby for the future but screwing it up or not being able to finish it.

Josie Quigley-Jay's Slidely by Slidely Slideshow

This is the last section of the video in place obviously there'll still be some tweaking as I want to include shots of the mother without the child but I quite liked this for now. I also received a little bit of feedback from one of my peers:- 

After deciding on what products I wanted to use as merchandise I've taken them to photoshop and started editing. I began my taking my albums logo design and removing the background to place on the merchandise. 

As part of my research for my music video I found this old educational video for teenagers regarding sex before marriage in which  a young Brenda decides to have sex with her partner which results in a pregnancy and her partner leaving her at the command of his mother. As she then cannot look after the child she gives it up for adoption. After watching this video I really want to incorporate it within my music video to help the narration. I want to use it in two areas, the beginning and the end. At the beginning of my music video I want to use clips of Brenda with her partner happy, telling him shes pregnant and being shouted at by his mother edited together with elements of sound bleeding in to the music such as 'slut' from the mother to help give a sense of events before the music video. I'd also like to include the clips of Bertha giving away the child at the end to help clarify the story line of a teenage mother giving away her child.

http://news.bbc.co.uk/1/hi/magazine/7899356.stm

The video on the link has refused to work since I found it so this is the video but excuse the heavy 'meme' editing someone has done to it.